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zircon's judging: Well, this is an improvement over the previous version.. but I think there are still some issues holding it back. For instance, the
synths are generally 'abrasive'. The opening synth, for instance, should be quieter and more melodic -
gliding on those arpeggios rather than slicing through them. The lead synth (which I recognize from a Synth1 bank, heheh) is probably too distorted and saturated for the rest of the mix. Again, consider going lighter on that. The drums also need work. Their sequencing is good, but you need to process them in a more pleasing fashion. The
bass drum is not very audible but has a lot of
reverb, making the low end muddy. You might try a more substantial kick, but
go light on the reverb. The snare is somewhat overpowering, though the hats and crashes are good. I'm not sure if you intended for this, but basically, the drums sound like a march, when I think a laid-back groove would suit the rest of the mix much better.
You're moving in the right direction. Keep expanding on your arrangement ideas, add more harmony,
tighten up the percussion and synthwork.
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